*odavis rocks the coloured pencil mojo, you should check him out for some inspiration.

I'm just going to point form this 'kay. The Neo Citran is clouding my brain too much for coherency.

Things to consider:

- line weight - your overall sense of anatomy and perspective is good on the figures but the lack of variety in line weight is what makes them feel flat. Make the stuff in behind and pulled by gravity thicker to add fluidity and movement.

- table top - in a word: lazy. Using your leading out from the center perspective as a guide build up the colouring on the table to make it look solid

- lighting - where there is light, there is shadow. Where there is lots of light, the shadows are harder. If this room is lit by the torches, the walls should be a heck of a lot darker. Get some heavy shadows directly below the sconces and some rounder (reflecting the transition of the light) shadows around the flames. With that in mind, the characters in the crowd are lit from above so their shading should be heavily top lit. You've got the right idea in the shadows between the people in the crowd, just move it further up and make it solid.

- figure shadows on the table, flatter & darker with a larger section directly beneath the figures.


Things that are working:

- the composition itself is really strong and you've got a great sense of narrative. I know exactly what is going on here even if I wasn't familiar with the source.

= The crowd - Screw the anatomy and whatever you think you did wrong here. That'll all come with practice. You've got great interplay between all of the figures and in a piece with so many characters that counts for a lot. The perspective and proportions are well established and you've really captured a sense of many different 'characters' I see different personalities in the crowd and that, my friend, goes very far.